On Saturday, my aunt, uncle, and their child came over from San Francisco to spend some time with us. Its been a while since they’ve been over to our house. So after my parents and my aunt and uncle were done talking; my dad decided to go to an amusement park to entertain the kids. My sister invited her two friends to go with us. So off we went to Riverside. As we got to Castle Park it was getting mildly hot. Everyone except the grown ups and I did not go on the rides. I wasn’t feeling to my normal self so I decided to not go on. All the little ones were having fun, my sister went off with her friends, and I went to the arcade to play video games. On that occasion I also won some prizes. So it was getting late so we decieded to leave. When we got back into Ontario, my dad went to go buy food to put on the grill. I had to get the grill ready so I turned the nozzle for the propane tank. As my dad cooked my friend came over and brought Guitar Hero. So we were playing then my dad called us over and we were playing dominoes. After that we ate. It was getting late so everyone helped pick up trash. I was tired after that so I went to bed.
April 3, 2008 at 4:33 pm
Please describe the events as if they are happening. You tell what you did, but without the descriptions it doesn’t feel like I am there. What is the importance of the story. Try to find a conflict to write about so your story has more purpose.
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